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Episode published on Saturday 25th of June, 2005.
This is what passed for dramatic intrigue to my 17-year old mind. Unfortunately what came over as being voiced by the movie trailers guy in my head actually reads like exactly what it is: a 17-year old (with the plot sense of a 14-year old) trying desperately to write a dramatic opening for their webcomic. I've learned since then exactly how to start something off dramatically - blow something up (preferably an orphanage for that extra tragic edge) and then have the main characters abseil in on hang-gliders only using their teeth to grip.
At least I had the sense to try and use a ruler, but this was still way before the concept of digitally cleaning lineart dawned on me (and this version you see now has actually been cleaned up a little in comparison to its first incarnation!). Even the lighting in the fourth panel was added at a later date, the first version was just in shades of brown.
I have considered going back and making a new opening for Detulux, but it's just not worth the time and effort. Besides, I like looking at how awful these early strips are. They give me hope for the future, and who are you to take that away from me, you intangible 'net fascist?!?
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Location - Detulux HQ,
Location - Paris, France
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Transcript
Title - 01: "Setting the Scene"
(First panel - an aerial view of a large building near the end of a row of houses. It is four stories high and vast enough to have markings on its flat rooftop for a helicopter to land on.)
Narrator: On the outskirts of a small French town there is a warehouse.
(Second panel - a front-on view of the building. The colour of the building is various shades of brown, and the front is adorned with three entrances - two of these are normal sized doors, but the third entrance is a vast pair of sliding doors, like those on an aircraft hangar. The sky is bright blue and implies that the weather is that of a pleasant French Summer.)
Narrator: It lies unquestioned. And why not? It's only the storage facility for a well-known company.
(Third panel - an angled view on a signpost. The signpost is a two-legged steel construction with one overhanging lighting strip to illuminate the sign in the dark.)
Sign: "Detulux Incorporated. You want it? We've got it. A Branch of the S. Pain Corporation."
Narrator: Dealers in...well, you know, STUFF.
(The fourth and last panel - a dark interior illuminated with a dim light from above. A helicopter can be made out in the dimness, along with a tank, two large missiles, a crate marked "AK47 x 50", another crate marked "Stingers" and a third marked "Colt Pistols". There are other indistinguishable crates that fill the room.)
Narrator: What that stuff is, however, remains hidden from public eyes. And for a pretty damn good reason too.
